“How I Learned to Program Computers” – by Feross
Aboukhadiejeh
The first thing that struck me was that it was easy to read. I enjoy reading, but if the writer puts too many complex words, I get lost and loose interest on what the subject is about. Feross also started with a story. I love stories about years ago when I did thus and so….
My mother was a great story teller, always
starting with something that was about her childhood. She kept me captive for long periods of time,
and made me laugh. Maybe that is why I
loved pioneer stories…it was from before and how people lived or did things, starting with the basics and building on what has
happened to what is now. His examples of
his first project to finalizing with the steps in his progress of success. It all takes practice and hard work. The more I practice at writing the better I will
get, so don’t give up when the first one feels like a flop.
“How I Learned to Live Google Free” – by Joshua J. Romero
Joshua’s narrative is not as “easy to read” as
Feross’s. He has longer more difficult
words, but uses them in a way that is comprehensible. He wanted to test the waters of “google” to see
how deeply inbedded he was with all the services. He went step by step in “degoogling”
himself. It worked and he proved a
point. In writing my papers, proving my point, will be
interesting….and how I get there. Joshua’s paragraphs can get a bit long, but
still understandable. I am going to try
and keep my paragraphs between 3-6 sentences long.
Over all , both narratives were written in a easy to read format; they were straight forward, showing examples. I preferred Feross’s to Joshua’s but both well written. I hope that my writings will not bore my readers. I look forward to how they will turn out.
I think you have some great ideas about the progression of your story. I hope you write more about your mom. She sounds like a good inspiration.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Patricia's comments! I also hope you write more about your mom--good work in all the posts so far!
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